There’s always something new to learn about the craft of writing. Last week I encountered the word phatism while reading a blog by John Yeoman. I looked it up in the dictionary but couldn’t find it—not even in the urban slang dictionary—but I think it’s an appropriate word. Yeoman described a phatism as a type of cliché that is “an empty sound or expression.” His example is the word “nice,” which isn’t particularly descriptive. It can mean nothing or it can mean anything, e.g., a “nice” sunrise or “nice” death. He wrote that copy editors loathe “nice.”
Yeoman
mentioned that Agatha Christie used “nice” in her stories to trick readers just
before a tragic event occurred. When she clustered words like “sweet” and
“pleasant” with “nice,” catastrophe was imminent.
He
thought phatisms served only one useful purpose--as placeholders. If you’re
stuck for the correct word while writing, drop in “nice” or a similar vague
word and then move on. In the editing stage use the find function and replace
the phatism with a better word or delete it.
The
second new-to-me concept I ran across was white
space. I knew that white space was important in screenplays and graphic
design but didn’t know that short story and novel writers use it as a tool, too.
For anyone unfamiliar with this term, white space is the blank between characters,
lines and paragraphs.
White
space can:
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Give
the eye a break when reading blocks of dense text.
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Set
off a main point. Since the absence of content attracts the eye, sentences
closest to the white space are more easily remembered. Otherwise, a reader may
skim a long paragraph.
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Allow
the reader to better absorb what is written and increase comprehension.
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Create
rhythm by varying the amount of text between chapters or paragraphs.
Using
white space is a choice. A writer may choose to write long paragraphs in a
formal, thoughtful narrative and then switch to short, choppy sentences to
quicken the pace during action scenes. Comedy writers use short sentences
because it provides quick movement.
One
time, DeMarinis was inspired to write a short story that was a parody of a
romance novel in the form of a villanelle.
(Again, I had to look the word up in the dictionary but this time found it.) A villanelle
is a highly structured nineteen-line poem with alternately repeating first and
third lines and using only two rhymes throughout. One famous villanelle is “Do
Not Go Gentle into That Good Night” by Dylan Thomas. (Link to poem: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15377)
DeMarinis
wrote his short story consisting of nineteen paragraphs with each paragraph
corresponding to a line in a villanelle. He had to fudge a little to stay true
to the form since the first and third paragraphs needed to repeat at the end.
What
did you learn last week?
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John
Yeoman’s blog:
Suzannah
Windsor Freeman’s post about white space: http://writeitsideways.com/how-and-when-to-use-white-space-in-writing/
I have a Word document titled “Edits before Finalizing Manuscript,” which I use to remind me of all the things I need to correct before I consider the manuscript done.
ReplyDeleteEliminating my personal phatisms is included in the last section, (all the major edits are done; I’m down to wordsmithing—in its positive sense). I think of them as namby-pamby words to eliminate or strengthen.
A few of my words to replace include poor (unless it describes a level of poverty), just, very and quite.
~ Jim
I tried a handy tool that may be similar to "Edits before Finalizing Manuscript" called Pro Writing Aid. And it's free! I think it's closer to AutoCrit and it's free!
ReplyDeleteNow I have some work to do ... since it only points out the mistakes.
Agatha Christie taught me the word "unctuous." I have yet to use it in one of my stories, but I hope to use it someday.
ReplyDeleteI haven't heard of phatism, but I understand the concept. In a script when I'm stuck or know I haven't pinned down what I need to say, I color the font red in that area so I don't forget to go back and rework that paragraph or sentence.
Robert Parker taught me about white space. His dialogue was incomparable, Spenser's back and forth with Susan emphasizing the strength of their relationship, but it also served to give him great white space that moved his stories forward.
This week, Caroline Graham is teaching me new vocabulary words. Furbelow--the flounce of a woman's skirt. I didn't know there was a word that described this motion! Intransigence--inflexibility. Nope, I would have just said inflexible. Simplistic me.
What a smart idea to create a personalized reminder of things you need to correct in a manuscript, Jim. I have a mental list of phatisms to replace but should write them down.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jenny, for mentioning Pro Writing Aid. I like the price.
ReplyDeleteBest of luck editing!
E.B., I agree that Robert Parker wrote top-notch dialogue. I hadn’t considered the way he used white space to move the story forward. Thank you for pointing that out. Now, I want to read and study the dialogue between Spenser and Susan.
ReplyDeleteI also enjoy learning new words while I’m reading for pleasure. I hope you find a way to write “unctuous” in a story.
One of the reviewers of MURDER MANHATTAN STYLE suggested that I needed more "mythic distance." I didn't know what that meant. A friend explained that as a writer I should not let readers "see me sweat" over the work.
ReplyDeleteI hadn't heard of the phrase "mystic distance," Warren. Perhaps it also refers to the separation between the writer and audience or writer and story?
ReplyDeleteKara, quite an interesting topic and with a word I'd never heard of. I'm enjoying all the comments you're getting, too.
ReplyDeleteNice is such a bland word very much overused and often used so one doesn't have to say what one really thinks such as in response to a question, "Do you like my new hairdo?" It's kinder to say "It's nice," than saying I think it's awful.
As far as Warren's "mystic distance" I often hear the voice of a writer I know in his/her work. It doesn't bother me at all.
Great blog, Kara! I'd never have thought of structuring a short story after a villanelle--and I'm a poet!
ReplyDeleteYes, Jim! "Just." I always have to search for that and a few other words that I've learned are my stupid crutches in every final draft. *sigh*
thanks for introducing me to the term phatism. LOVE IT.
ReplyDeleteI like your example of a new haircut, Gloria. I’m somewhat suspicious when someone tells me my new dress or hair style is “nice.” It’s a good reminder that I need to be careful of bland word choice.
ReplyDeleteLinda, I thought DeMarinis was clever to structure a short story after a villanelle. It couldn’t have been an easy thing to do.
ReplyDeleteI like “phatism,” too, Carla. It was new to me and I had to read it twice because I thought there was a typo.
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