Dos and Don’ts for Starting a Book
Don’t use more than one exclamation point ! — Okay two at most — on the first page. As a reader I will assume you don’t know how to describe emotion in words!! No doubt, I will be wrong some of the time, but my experience suggests that I will be correct the great majority of the time!!!
Don’t change fonts in an attempt to pique my interest. As a reader I’m interested in words, not software mechanics.
Don’t introduce a new character every page and a half. I will be unable to remember and tell them apart.
Don’t start chapter one with a scene that would fit very well in the middle of chapter three. A friend and quite a good writer once started her book with a very well written description of a woman coming home and playing with her cat. She got consistently good feedback from critique group members until it came to me. I told her the opening would probably entice the entire universe of six people who speak English and are absolutely fascinated by the idea that a woman might have a pet cat. (And, being a forgiving soul, the writer still talks to me.)
Don’t ignore or be completely bound by traditional grammar. Poor grammar, (as well as spelling, punctuation, and formatting) is a turn off but a skillfully used sentence fragment or irregular grammar in dialog that fits a character can be powerfully effective.
Don’t “head hop” from one character’s point of view to another’s rapidly unless you have mastered the technique. Going from unknown baddie to heroine/hero can work extremely well, especially if large sections of the book are told from each point of view and if the transition between them is clear.
Don’t make your heroine the least interesting person in the book. If she floats along passively like a twig in a flowing stream why would anyone want to spend time with her?
Don’t repeat my frequent mistake of not giving enough information about a character. Just because I know all about my characters, their history and how much pocket change they carry, does not excuse me from sharing needed “obvious” information with readers.
Don’t repeat my other frequent mistake of changing a character’s name in mid-story.
Finally, don’t ask why there aren’t any dos.
What persuades you to put a book down before you finish page one?
I have put books down by the end of the first page or two due to poor grammar, spelling and punctuation. Otherwise I will give an author at least one chapter, but I have been known to walk away from books with the following:
ReplyDelete* Poor spelling, grammar and punctuation (yep, repeated this one intentionally).
* Boring or slow (your cat scene is on target).
* Jumps into the action so fast that I have absolutely no reason to like or dislike the character.
* A main character whose behavior is idiotic.
* A completely unrealistic plot.
* Head hopping within the same chapter (I began a book that I put down after six pages, because the author had changed point of views 13 times in those six pages, even once in the middle of a paragraph).
* Excessive telling and no (or little) showing.
Laura
Laura,
ReplyDeleteI agree with all your comments. Changing POVs 13 times in 6 pages must be a world record, don't you think?
I agree with Silverhearts7 although I'm aware now that not all editing errors are made by the author. Not all publishers are equal.
ReplyDeleteI have a pet peeve that sometimes makes me crazy--changing tenses during narrative. I've put a book down on the first page once when I saw that, and in that particular case, there was no reason for the switch in tenses, and it wasn't dialogue.
Aside from that, I usually give an author at least the first chapter. Opposite from agents, I really try to like everything I read. Of course, I don't, but try to start out open minded.
Excellent thinking Warren and your commenters as well.
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With my checked past as an editor and a writing contest judge, i have, sadly, gotten past the point when I try to like everything I read. However, It is exciting to find a new author who shows craft and knowledge.
ReplyDeleteI can overlooks some grammatical and spelling errors, but if forced to muddle through fifty pages of backstory to get to the real action, the book gets tossed.
ReplyDeleteSadly, ever the best-known publishers don't edit well anymore. A backstory "dump" is an excellent reason to dump the book. I find it irritating when the mood of a book swings,e.g. from scary to funny within a few pages and with no transition.
ReplyDeleteI'm hooked if I'm presented with an interesting problem I have no idea how to solve. Then the person involved in trying to solve it needs to show intelligence and at least some persistence.
ReplyDeleteBack story's a turn off because I like getting to know a character gradually.
Maybe I've been lucky but I haven't seen much bad grammar or spelling or head hopping.
So how do you avoid the problem of changing a character's name in the middle? Apparently this is not a uncommon problem. Writers in the SistersinCrime discussion list have mentioned cases in which the book was actually published withouth the writer, or an editor, catching the error.
ReplyDeleteGood points, Warren. When the first page is badly written and the opening is dull, I won't buy the book. But if one of those is good, I'll read on, at least through several pages or a chapter. As you said, a well-placed fragment or some unusual phrasing can add interest.
ReplyDeletePeg, I have not solved the problem of keeping a character's name consistent throughout a story. I changed a name mid-paragraph in the short story I am working on now. That's one of many reasons to have a skilled and trusted reader go over your work. My first reader is my wife. She caught the mistake.
ReplyDeleteEllis, I do the same. A good first page is not a guarantee of a good book but I've never read a good book that had a poorly-written first page. I suspect agents and editors who are swamped with manuscripts quickly eliminate many of them for the reasons you mentioned.
ReplyDeleteOnly one 'do' for me: Give me a compelling situation right up front. I can get past a lot else--or if it's a WIP, help fix it. And only one don't--don't fail to do that!
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