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Our September Author Interviews--9/6 Kathleen Valenti, 9/13 David Burnsworth, 9/20 Jeri Westerson, 9/27 Frances Brody. Please join us in welcoming these authors to WWK.

September Saturday Guest Bloggers: 9/2--Anne Bannon, 9/9 WWK Bloggers, 9/16 Margaret S. Hamilton, 9/23 Kait Carson, and on 9/30 Trixie Stiletto.

“May 16, 2017 – The Women’s Fiction Writers Association (WFWA) today announced the finalists of the second annual Star Award, given to authors of published women’s fiction. Six finalists were chosen in two categories, General and Outstanding Debut. The winners of the Star Award will be announced at the WFWA Retreat in Albuquerque, New Mexico on September 23, 2017.” In the general category, WWK’s Carla Damron was one of three finalist for her novel, The Stone Necklace. Go to Carladamron.com for more information. Congratulations, Carla!

Congratulations to our writers for the following publications:

Warren Bull's new Lincoln mystery, Abraham Lincoln In Court & Campaign has been released. Look for the Kindle version on February 3.

Shari Randall's "Pets" will be included in Chesapeake Crimes: Fur, Feathers, and Felonies anthology, which will be published in 2018. In the same anthology "Rasputin," KM Rockwood's short story, will also be published. Her short story "Goldie" will be published in the Busted anthology, which will be released by Level Best Books on April 25th.

In addition, our prolific KM will have the following shorts published as well: "Sight Unseen" in Fish Out of Water, Guppie (SinC) anthology, just released, and "Making Tracks" in Passport to Murder, Bouchercon anthology, October 2017.

Margaret S. Hamilton's short story, "Once a Kappa" was published as a finalist in the Southern Writer's Magazine annual short story contest issue. Mysterical-E published her "Double Crust Corpse" in the Fall 2016 issue. "Baby Killer" will appear in the 2017 solar eclipse anthology Day of the Dark to be published this summer prior to the eclipse in August.

James M. Jackson's 4th book in the Seamus McCree series, Doubtful Relations, is now available. His novella "Low Tide at Tybee" appears February 7 as part of Lowcountry Crimes: Four Novellas, which is available for order.

Friday, July 1, 2011

Internal and External Dialog

Internal and External Dialog

I’ve written here before about the power of dialog to reveal character, advance plot, foreshadow events, make the back story more interesting and engage the reader. For me, one kind of dialog that is particularly daunting is internal dialog.

With permission of the author I would like to quote extensively from Susan G. Ferguson’s “Pearls” from her remarkable collection of short stories, Gaze. http://www.ninthmonthpublishing.com/books.html

I wanted so much to be a part of something that afternoon that the words, jarred loose by a glass of wine, tumbled from my lips like pearls from a bag. Round, shiny and hard, they bounced on the hardwood floor and around and over everywhere in the room where the bunch of us sat.

“What we ought to do is have a retreat at the farm,” I proposed to my new writer friends. “The kids — my adult children — have inherited the place.”

The farmhouse where I had once lived with their father and with them when they were babies had stood forlorn and empty for two years. I was taking care of it now, driving the ninety miles to check on things while the kids led their busy lives.

Everyone’s eyes were on me as I chattered.

“What do you think? It would be primitive. It would be cold and there won’t be enough water. And flies — this time of year there will be hundreds of dead flies. And no furniture. Well, some furniture, but no beds. Not beds like you’d expect. Sofas. And there’s no phone. But we should do this. It will be fun.”

Had I listened for one minute to what I was saying, I would have stopped and asked for a broom and a dustpan to sweep everything up. I should have listened to all the noise I was making, but I didn’t. I wanted to be part — and at that moment felt like I was, like I was close enough to these men and women that I could extend such an offer — that I just kept babbling.

As effective as the dialog is by itself, it is reinforced by the internal dialog the writer presents. The imagery is almost poetic. As a reader I ache with her need to belong and the words evoke memories of times where I tried ,and failed, to force myself to fit into a group that had no interest in accepting me.

I am struck by the vulnerability and courage of Ms. Ferguson in presenting her narrator and by extension herself in her neediness and lack of sophistication. One quality I find in excellent writers is their courage.

What qualities do you find in exceptional writing?


Kara Cerise said...

I do think writers need courage and lots of it! Also endurance and a sense of humor.

Thank you for sharing the beautiful passage by Susan G. Ferguson.

Warren Bull said...

She is a remarkable writer.

Pauline Alldred said...

A beautiful piece of writing. Courage certainly helps but I also think to make writing memorable, the writer needs to plumb the depths of an emotion, whatever it is--despair, loss, jealousy, anger.
And that takes courage but also patience and much self-acceptance.

Warren Bull said...

Pauline, Good observations.

E. B. Davis said...

I just read Crooked Letter, Crooked Letter by Tom Franklin. His internal dialogue helps the reader to get inside each of the main characters, who he presents in third person. A well done mystery, but one that explores the characters and their relationships, which is just as much part of the plot as the murders. A great read!