From the Second Person Point of View by KM Rockwood
Once upon a time, most fiction was written in an omniscient point of view, where the narrator knows all the thoughts of the characters, scenes and events. Sometimes hidden ones.
Authors would sometimes pause the story to address the audience. If you’ve read much Victorian literature, you’ve come across “Dear Reader” comments.
Most modern fiction, especially crime fiction, is told from either a close third person or a first person point of view. When handled well, this creates a connection between you, the reader and the character. You may also feel a sense of immediacy.
Every once in a while, though, you’ll run across a story in which the author has used a second person point of view.
You don’t just read the story—you’re invited to step in and live it. That’s the promise of second person point of view. When a writer says you, they hand you the flashlight, the blood-stained note, the uneasy feeling that someone’s watching. You become the detective, the victim, the perpetrator. And in crime fiction, that shift can be electric.
You feel the tension more intimately. Every creaking floorboard, every lie you tell, every clue you miss—it’s yours. The second person doesn’t let you hide behind a character’s choices. You are the character. That immediacy can heighten suspense, blur morality, and make the reader complicit in the crime. You’re not just watching someone break into the house. You’re the one turning the knob.
This perspective can be very unsettling. Its use is not common, and that makes it all the more powerful. You’re thrown off balance. You question your instincts. In psychological thrillers, second person can mimic dissociation or guilt. You’re split from yourself, watching your own hands do something terrible. Or maybe an omniscient narrator is addressing you. Someone who tracks your every move.
It can be particularly effective with an unreliable narrator.
Sometimes only part of the story is told this way, toggling between mesmerizing scenes that grip your soul and others with less intensity.
In crime fiction, that’s the point. You’re not just solving the mystery. You’re tangled in it.
Have you read any of these examples of second person point of view?
Iain Pears – The Portrait
Pears, known for An Instance of the Fingerpost, took a daring turn with The Portrait, a psychological thriller written entirely in second person. The narrator, Henry MacAlpine, is a self-exiled portrait painter. He invites an art critic and former friend to sit for a portrait, all the while plotting retribution for perceived wrongs.
Jay McInerney – Bright Lights, Big City
More of a phycological tale than a mystery, this novel follows an unnamed character for a week as his life falls apart around him. He is fired from his prestigious job, his wife not only leaves him but publicly humiliates him, he is dealing with the unprocessed grief surrounding his mother’s death. Emotionally disoriented, he turns to outrageous partying and drug use to cope. This was made into a movie in 1988.
Michel Butor – La Modification
In this French classic, Léon Delmont, a middle-aged Parisian businessman, is on a train journey to tell his paramour he is leaving his wife and convince her to move to Paris to be with him. The entire story takes place on the train ride, while he struggles with this self-imposed dilemma. Translations to English are available under several different titles.
Caroline Kepnes – You
Joe Goldberg, owner of a New York City bookstore, becomesobsessed with Guinevere Beck when she comes into his store. His stalking and concentration on “you”—Guinevere, but by extension, the reader—is eerie and unsettling. Netflix made a movie based on this.
Are you ever tempted to try writing from the second person point of view?
Little temptation as I am still trying to master the other points of view in a way that engages readers and gives them enjoyment.
ReplyDeleteWe are always striving to improve and relate to our readers.
DeleteI'm with Debra. If it's not done EXTREMELY well, I think second person can be jarring and awkward. At least, that's how it feels when I've attempted it.
ReplyDeleteYes, it can be jarring. When I'm reading I also find present tense to be jarring. But a fair number of authors use it successfully.
DeleteI've grown to accept first person. However, first person PRESENT tense is another option that requires a great deal of skill to make it work (in my opinion, at least).
DeleteI have not read your examples. I once experimented with it for a short story and abandoned the project.
ReplyDeleteLike you, I've tried it with short stories, but none of them ever reached the point where I felt they were ready to share with anyone but my very close critique group, all of whom were uncomfortable with it. Doesn't look like second person stories are in my immediate future.
ReplyDeleteInteresting post, KM. I am one of those who finds second person unsettling. I admire writers who can pull it off.
ReplyDeleteI always think of second person as persuasive advertising. "You know you want it. Rub your hand on the soft silk. Now hold the dress in front of you and admire your new self in the mirror." Almost creepy and very intrusive.
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